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Avoiding Personal Pronouns:
in my past writings i've used the pronoun 'our' when i should have used a different word or rephrased the sentence. using a better personal pronoun would make my writing alot better. i used http://www.buzzin.net/english/pronouns.htm to help me out.

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Avoiding contractions in academic writing:

i have a habit of using contractions when it comes to writing. it comes natural and it has become a bad habit. so ive used this website: http://www.yourdictionary.com/dictionary-articles/using-contractions.html to see everything better and to avoid using contractions in my writing :)

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Quotation Marks:
using direct and indirect quotation marks is kinda confusing when it comes to writing it in paragraphs. so ive found a way to use them correctly. i do not need to use a quotation mark when its an original peice. in direct quotation marks is when im not quoting a phrase directly. i can just sum up a sentence or two and add the quotation marks.

2 ways a woman can get hurt

i find this kilbourne peice rather facinating and very interesting. some ads today seem very pointless while they are degrading women. such as the cologne/perfume ads in magazines such as Vogue and Elle. i mean come on the ad about the shaving cream...thats ridiculous! "2 ways a woman can get hurt---> heartbreaker or razor." ads so mistreat women in their scene in the magazines. how a man can look like hes ripping off her clothes to where shes trying to say "no" but looks like shes laughing away. the only sentence that really caught my attention and i think it applies to all men today is the sentence on page 423 first paragraph "..he can respond to the scent like any other animal" nowdays it seems like a man can stop at nothing to try to get what he wants which is ridiculous.

Killa Culture

reading this peice from david kepalian made me think about how the world is turning out now days. a lot of the topics being issued is very difficult to read. what people do for attention and what makes them feel good is ridiculous. i do have to admit that kepalian does a really good job on nailing a lot of strong influences thats chaning the american society. from rapper lyrics to splitting your tongue america is rapidly being changed by a common force... the human race. the more i read the more i wanted to know how he was goin to end it. its crazy to know that this issue of among americans is so bad that someone has written an essay about it. no matter how bad the american society gets there no one to blame but ourselves. we made this happen and its growing and who knows when it'll all come to a scretching halt.

"What we miss most about the 1950's": A Blog

Hmmm... what do we miss most about the 1950's? From my reading it seems like no one misses the 1950 unless your marraige and home life was great. But for the others who did not have much and who did not succeed at a marraige.. they did not miss it. I know a lot has went on about how our life formed from the many people before this generation. The writing seems like it was a little too much to reveal. To make people think more about how life was grand on shows like Leave it to Beaver, I love Lucy and Father Knows Best... would probably make them miss those days. But those days were not even like that. There was a huge constant struggle among the American society. Also this writing does not compare how the African Americans, Hispanics and Navtive Americans lived life. In my opinion that's one thing most people skip writing about. Life wasnt too grand for familes who suffered in the segregation. Homeless kids did not come running to the dinner table in the evening or did not get to wash the family car on Sunday afternoons.